Class 10
December 22
The happiest day of my life
It is to have won the championship at a meeting of the soccer that I thought most happily in the conventional life.As for it, I was time of the eleventh grader.I participated in a match as a starter for the first time.I was tense very much and was not able to concentrate on a match.However, the teammates of the circumference called out to me, and at last I was able to keep a normal heart.I did not learn the content of the match clearly, but the result was able to win somehow.I remember that I was pleased to embrace each other after a match together clearly.I think that the memory of this time will not need to fade away throughout the life in future.I pray for there being a lot of splendid events to win through up to such a lifetime memory in life in the future.
Do not use "It" in your topic sentence. If we did not know the title, we would not know what you are writing about! Concluding sentence? 8/10
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